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2012-03-19T12:55:55.066-07:00

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nothing in mr roscoe's class

2012-03-19T12:48:46.732-07:00

nothing in mr roscoe's class

hahahaha soo what are youh doing

2012-03-19T12:45:52.251-07:00

hahahaha soo what are youh doing

lol your welcome

2012-03-19T12:41:47.164-07:00

lol your welcome

thank you

2012-03-19T12:40:42.723-07:00

thank you

good story

2012-03-19T12:39:39.817-07:00

good story

Thank you very much for that excellent review, Dav...

2012-02-07T20:09:20.609-08:00

Thank you very much for that excellent review, David. I really appreciate it!

The writers idea bank sounds good; but keep them i...

2012-01-10T22:14:27.953-08:00

The writers idea bank sounds good; but keep them in a word document for yourself - for later when you have time :)

Always a bright shiny new idea waiting to attack at the end of every project. Or actually, the middle. I'm constantly having to stop myself and go back to something that got a plot hang-up, and therefore became uninteresting to me for a while.

At least you have ideas Jace. That's the important thing.

I'm pretty sure Satan is in charge of the publishing house. Otherwise, we'd all be living high off the proceeds and able to write all those story ideas without the pesky day job interference :)

..........dhole

Of course I'm a naughty girl :) That was an a...

2011-12-19T17:47:45.961-08:00

Of course I'm a naughty girl :)

That was an awesome short story. What a great character; and you kept the tension riveting even without action. It had me in tears a couple times. And the ending about ripped my heart out.

Very well done Jace.

Merry Christmas and Happy New Year dude.

........dhole

Thanks, Lisa! Yes, it has been a while. School has...

2011-12-19T09:23:23.114-08:00

Thanks, Lisa! Yes, it has been a while. School has kept me quite busy. Congrats for winning!

It's been a while! Congrats on finishing Nano ...

2011-12-19T08:52:51.417-08:00

It's been a while! Congrats on finishing Nano and major kudos on encouraging your students to do it too!! I think that's awesome. And FYI, I "won" too even though my rough draft wasn't done. :D

Awww <3

2011-11-30T19:10:32.944-08:00

Awww <3

I'm just sorry it took me so long to get to it...

2011-10-24T11:32:42.538-07:00

I'm just sorry it took me so long to get to it. I've been holding back, because I wanted to give it my full attention, and things have been a little crazy.

AWWWWW, thanks for the awesome review! I really ap...

2011-10-24T11:28:48.078-07:00

AWWWWW, thanks for the awesome review! I really appreciate your in depth look at the story. I'm flattered that you didn't *notice* the first person narrative at first, I do take that as a huge compliment, though I myself write best in 1st. All good points! :D

96 Donna! You missed the double t in 'putting....

2011-10-19T05:08:51.013-07:00

96 Donna! You missed the double t in 'putting.'

If nothing else, this proves that editing is hard work! After a while, even the right words start looking wrong!

Excellent try, Donna. You got an 88. You missed Ti...

2011-10-19T05:06:34.310-07:00

Excellent try, Donna. You got an 88. You missed Timely, absolutely, and Fortunately. Have to watch those -ly suffixes!

Thanks for playing. :)

I think its great that you work up your own stuff....

2011-10-18T22:57:33.489-07:00

I think its great that you work up your own stuff. This looks like something my own 13 year old would write :)

There was one key to happiness in Jane’s life: she partied. Partying was everything to her. It occupied all of her free time and delighted her and her friends. Their favorite place to party was a club that admitted them even though they had not aged to 18 yet. They had made copies of their driver‘s licenses and handed them over, smiling. The IDs claimed the girls were 21. They had tried to get into other clubs, but the bouncers stopped them at the door. One threatened to call their parents! Jane finally was getting to have a good time, when suddenly, she heard a bad sound: “Police. Everyone stay where you are!" They were taking everyone’s IDs and puting them under arrest! When her parents came to get her, she was ashamed of what she had done.

I don't consider using word cheating ;) Fine, ...

2011-10-18T22:41:15.199-07:00

I don't consider using word cheating ;)
Fine, I'll correct it hear - uh, here. .

The Thief was riding a stolen bicycle he had gotten from the Clown Chief. The famous Chief had said that it was absolutly the safest ride in town. The clowns had deceived the thief, however. The bike was not the safest ride at all; it was a hopeless piece of junk. Their idea of a joke was going to leave the thief sitting there on the side of the road. Although the thief believed that it was a well-made bike, the wheels were becoming a problem. The rubber was wasting away as he rode. Soon, he was sitting in the gutter, hoping to receive a bit of timly luck. Fortunatly, a neighbor was driving by at that very moment. They threw the bike into the trash and went looking for their friends the clowns.

I had to read it at least 3 times to be sure. A tough one :)

.......dhole

Nice to meet you, too, Lydia! Thanks for dropping ...

2011-10-16T05:30:08.347-07:00

Nice to meet you, too, Lydia! Thanks for dropping in. The next one goes up tomorrow. :)

This looks like a great lesson. Found your blog fr...

2011-10-15T18:02:51.000-07:00

This looks like a great lesson. Found your blog from Donna's. Nice to meet you!

Though come to think of it, using Microsoft Word m...

2011-10-01T07:39:17.898-07:00

Though come to think of it, using Microsoft Word may be cheating...

Well done, Donna! Grade of 104 and a sticker.

2011-09-30T01:14:28.213-07:00

Well done, Donna! Grade of 104 and a sticker.

LOL; I had to open a word document to help with th...

2011-09-27T00:40:53.411-07:00

LOL; I had to open a word document to help with this one. Not as good as a “spelling bee”, but we Mundanians have to make do. And if I remember my Xanth geneology, Dor had his father Bink’s luck for misadventure; though it was less a talent for Dor, and more of a fortuitous outcome. His first adventure was about getting away from his sister, Ivy?

Rather than “list” all the mistakes, how about if I rewrite it properly:

The Land of Xanth
by Dor

I live in the Land of Xanth, which is distinct from Mundania in that there is magic in Xanth and none in Mundania. Everyone in Xanth has his own magic talent; no two are the same. Some can conjure things, and others can make a hole or illusions or can soar through the air. But in Mundania no one does magic, so it’s very dull. There are not (should be aren’t?) any dragons there. Instead there are bears and horses and a great many other monsters. Our ruler is King Trent, who has reigned for seventeen years. He transforms people to other creatures. No one gets chased here; we fare in peace. My tale is done.

From Centaur Aisle by Piers Anthony, p. 14

Powerful excerpt!! Very cool choice - good job!

2011-08-14T18:29:55.781-07:00

Powerful excerpt!! Very cool choice - good job!

This was awesome. Loved the battle. And the endi...

2011-08-13T11:19:51.344-07:00

This was awesome. Loved the battle. And the ending.

Those choices were intriguing too. Man, I had hoped he'd go for the hell hound, but I so understood opting for the Angel. Excellent writing here Jace.

........dhole